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Can't get past the constant shifts between present and past tense! How about you edit the book and publish it again? After all the $0 price implies that you want give away this book so people like you as author, right?
The only really positive thing I can say is that the action really zips along. Although, there are even problems with that the way the action sequences are chopped up among the many characters' points of view..
The plot development is, in my opinion, amateurish. A large part of the story is based on the fact that they keep getting found out despite being pretty cautious. I'm OK with things not always going smoothly for the characters, but there should be a reasonable explanation as to why. And everything I see other reviewers have complained about I have to agree with. The space suits are described as one size in one passage and different sizes in others. Why does the rogue starship get its hands on super illegal super missiles that apparently the government sponsored bad guys don't have? Also, apparently with FTL drive planets are days apart. Still, chapters featuring a newscaster reporting on the space battle sending updates to her newsroom seem to propagate everywhere with no time lag. Neat trick. They wouldn't have survived the battle if they hadn't accidentally acquired an amazingly unlikely robot able to keep the ship repaired even as it's being destroyed.
There are a number of wrong words (phased is not an alternate spelling of fazed), typos, and missing words although, really, that part isn't too bad. I've seen much worse and much better.
Grammatically, something is very wrong. Maybe I mean syntactically? The problem seems to be mostly with verb tense and over use of the character's first names. Sometimes the author's narrative seems stilted.
I honestly cannot recommend this book. I like more rational in the books I read
This is a good example of why self-published books have such a bad reputation. It might be a good story, but it's so badly written that I couldn't get through the first chapter. An editor would have caught the mistakes. A second or third reader would have caught the contradictions in the story or questioned things like why are their pockets in prisoners' jumpsuits? What do they keep out of sight in their pockets? Maybe the book gets better if you read further. I just couldn't be bothered.
1. Editing, WHAT editing? 2. Original content, WHAT original content? If there is an original thought in this book...NAH, NOT even. 3. ROFL, 1st person changing to 3rd in the same sentence repeatedly! UGH! 4. Did I mention this is ALL written in First, that is 1st, person? To repeat myself, UGH! Glad this was free but my time is worth way more than this trash. REFUND please!
The inital plot is promising but the grammatical errors were so distracting that I didn't get past the first few pages. With a good editor there might be some hope for this book but until then it isn't worth reading.
Seriously, get an editor. Do not try to publish your next book without one. The plot was interesting, the characters were borrowed but well played. The lack of basic high school English skills made this book a struggle to finish.